Yes, I remember that fic -- and I thought you nailed it: it was the level of provocation that would be necessary, and it was the level of language that rang true. (Now that I think of it, I didn't even know you at the time that I read it.)
At any rate, it worked for me then, and it works for me now.
And in all of the fics of yourse that I've read so far, the characters speak with their own voices, and you as a writer speak with yours, which is different from your 'journaling' voice, although I've occasionally noticed stylistic echoes of the former in the latter.
As far as the gimme-a-break-Mac-is-human business goes . . . ah, well. The "Director's Cut" version of "Phoenix Rising" actually included my first attempt at a sex scene. (Lothi gave that one a thumb's-up too.) I think he'd be a crashing bore if he were perfect.
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Date: Sep. 29th, 2008 09:17 pm (UTC)At any rate, it worked for me then, and it works for me now.
And in all of the fics of yourse that I've read so far, the characters speak with their own voices, and you as a writer speak with yours, which is different from your 'journaling' voice, although I've occasionally noticed stylistic echoes of the former in the latter.
As far as the gimme-a-break-Mac-is-human business goes . . . ah, well. The "Director's Cut" version of "Phoenix Rising" actually included my first attempt at a sex scene. (Lothi gave that one a thumb's-up too.) I think he'd be a crashing bore if he were perfect.